tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post5025217033546360837..comments2023-04-09T07:50:22.398-04:00Comments on 39 For the First Time: Write on Edge: DusseldorfVictoriaKPhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07987993161693042703noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-12933656757663177042012-03-03T14:50:52.135-05:002012-03-03T14:50:52.135-05:00Aw, what a great moment, I love that spark between...Aw, what a great moment, I love that spark between them and their meeting of worlds. Beautifully described, great pace and dialogue. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-56397215559886109172012-03-02T22:38:21.271-05:002012-03-02T22:38:21.271-05:00I really liked this. I think it was a great way to...I really liked this. I think it was a great way to incorporate the line, and turn it into so much more.<br /><br />Great chemistry between them, even in strife-like and intense conversations. Well done and I would like to read more of them!Andreahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06972798018825603047noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-45924410033524494422012-03-02T15:35:58.351-05:002012-03-02T15:35:58.351-05:00glad she agreed to a date. I like how you're p...glad she agreed to a date. I like how you're progressing the story. I found the fluctuation between the POV a little hard to read and I think it would flow cleaner if you tightened it a bit. There are some great lines here, I especially liked "fiddled with her straw". It shows her frame of mind perfectly. <br /><br />Excellent job. I'm ready for more!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-16453365383794064262012-03-02T12:47:25.346-05:002012-03-02T12:47:25.346-05:00nicely done - I really like these characters, and ...nicely done - I really like these characters, and I'm really glad she seems to be giving him a chance :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-59875567110106293362012-03-02T11:03:29.542-05:002012-03-02T11:03:29.542-05:00This was well written. I gobbled it up. My favorit...This was well written. I gobbled it up. My favorite line was, " Karen’s eyes looked wild as she spoke, like the blue center of a flame." That a great analogy.<br />I also liked how Henry challenged Karen and Karen's acceptance of his challenge. The dialogue was quick and the pacing good.<br /><br />Nicely done and perfect for the prompt:~)Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15995684156785464334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-84240928819465728362012-03-02T09:32:45.144-05:002012-03-02T09:32:45.144-05:00Well done! I like these characters, especially Hen...Well done! I like these characters, especially Henry. More about his background and Karen's to come?Melaniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01830964784682748651noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-72999542432292660072012-03-02T08:12:12.626-05:002012-03-02T08:12:12.626-05:00Well done! I like how he didn't give up when s...Well done! I like how he didn't give up when she threw up the walls and stereotyped him and his family. <br />I hope that you continue to use the prompts to further the story along!Jackiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15012551542418581742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-41180389133360748792012-03-02T08:06:06.957-05:002012-03-02T08:06:06.957-05:00Victoria, I really like the way he met her challen...Victoria, I really like the way he met her challenge head on. I think it speaks a lot to his character that he called her out on her judgement without being cruel or mean about it. I think the progression in the story, and the prompt worked nicely to highlight the difference between the two of them without seeming forced.angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14974137283220034062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-44835927119086835632012-03-01T20:09:54.557-05:002012-03-01T20:09:54.557-05:00Nicely done. I love the way everyone's playing...Nicely done. I love the way everyone's playing with the line so far!<br /><br />I also love the way Henry takes the wind out of her self-righteous sails. It's a great moment.Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407917830307384493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-92118872743148087552012-03-01T19:27:07.112-05:002012-03-01T19:27:07.112-05:00good job working around the prompt. I like Karen&#...good job working around the prompt. I like Karen's rollercoaster emotional state. She's very real. I just want to know her.<br /><br />more pleaseAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com