tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post935483374968325831..comments2023-04-09T07:50:22.398-04:00Comments on 39 For the First Time: TRDC: A Light in the FogVictoriaKPhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07987993161693042703noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-4978310942279905952011-05-22T16:02:00.076-04:002011-05-22T16:02:00.076-04:00Okay. I'm sitting here bawling. I think what r...Okay. I'm sitting here bawling. I think what really came through was her absolute inability to handle her life - not because she didn't want to, but because she didn't know how to continue alone. And then...her friend. Everyone needs a friend like that. Someone to hold your hand and pull you up when the world caves in.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-13882214805770302032011-05-21T13:44:01.842-04:002011-05-21T13:44:01.842-04:00The blend of grief, apathy, embarrassment and grat...The blend of grief, apathy, embarrassment and gratitude here is very well balanced.<br /><br />The flow and dialogue were very natural, and the light at the end of the tunnel was welcomed!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-81354776292101291972011-05-21T09:04:50.733-04:002011-05-21T09:04:50.733-04:00Excellent job furthering your backstory lady! You ...Excellent job furthering your backstory lady! You really captured the prompt and her sadness. I love that you managed to add in a turning point and some hope into it, too!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05381279330033574052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-21905252738523230842011-05-21T08:08:03.828-04:002011-05-21T08:08:03.828-04:00I agree, Peter is better. Barry is a little distra...I agree, Peter is better. Barry is a little distracting. It makes me think of presidents and love songs.Amandahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293649194823360181noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-75929710710672503552011-05-20T16:43:37.298-04:002011-05-20T16:43:37.298-04:00I like this character. She has a perfectly good r...I like this character. She has a perfectly good reason to have sunk into the state she is in but it's not her and when the chance comes along to fix things she grabs it. And things always do seem less bleak when the house is tidy.<br /><br />I can't wait to read more of this story too. I want the best for Michaela:)Valerie Boersmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08372768206512562126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-48607663028066609912011-05-20T14:33:27.928-04:002011-05-20T14:33:27.928-04:00I really liked this and will need to go back and r...I really liked this and will need to go back and read the previous works. Sadly, it sounds a little like life as a depressed housewife...ugh! The conversation was genuine and the characters were likeable. Nice job!<br /><br />- EmilyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-22590701922079770492011-05-20T12:52:29.131-04:002011-05-20T12:52:29.131-04:00I enjoyed this piece mostly because there is a raw...I enjoyed this piece mostly because there is a raw emotion that looms in the backdrop. I can sense the pain that Michaela is going through, it surrounds her and covers her as she continues to live through the days. Nicely done Victoria.Rathihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10575572965786947205noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-62110082046468095982011-05-20T12:26:40.424-04:002011-05-20T12:26:40.424-04:00I enjoyed this even without the high-speed chases,...I enjoyed this even without the high-speed chases, lightsaber duels, gambling, bullets, explosions and blood.<br /><br />That's in chapter 2, right?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09986167130467258392noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-57249057294781808472011-05-20T10:01:40.267-04:002011-05-20T10:01:40.267-04:00You did a great job with the dialogue. And so much...You did a great job with the dialogue. And so much of this rang true. All the details were necessary.Kimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01564542013071462911noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-17552028537343565142011-05-20T08:07:14.304-04:002011-05-20T08:07:14.304-04:00Nicely done. I'm a little bummed you killed o...Nicely done. I'm a little bummed you killed off Barry for Peter, but I understand when names go wrong, they go wrong ;-)Lisa @ Two Bears Farmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03464839163693785901noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-334632485304709507.post-38921151975694324542011-05-20T07:33:55.041-04:002011-05-20T07:33:55.041-04:00Oh I just read your post! I had goosebumps after r...Oh I just read your post! I had goosebumps after reading it. Can't wait to read more!!Crystalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14945252900990987680noreply@blogger.com