“May
I?” Mandy asked, startling a man sitting on the aisle next to a vacant window
seat.
He
gripped his duffel bag close to his chest and shifted his legs so she could get
by without saying anything. Relieved to get off her feet, Mandy ignored the way
he made the hairs on the back of her neck stand up.
She
began re-reading about the second trimester in What to Expect When You're
Expecting. At fourteen weeks, Mandy was
still waiting for the reduction in fatigue the book promised. Finding no
comfort in the book, she gazed out the window. In the reflection, she noticed
her seatmate looked like he was about to cry.
“Are
you okay?” she asked.
He
turned his head and stared through her. She cursed her budding maternal
instincts, wishing she hadn't asked.
“I'm
sorry. You just looked... I don't know. Sad? I didn't mean to be nosey.”
“Don’t
be sorry. I am sad. You're the first person to ask—a total stranger. No one at
work asked. None of my family. I feel invisible.”
“That's
terrible,” she said.
“Yes.”
he faced forward again. “You're very kind.”
“Thank
you,” she said and opened up her book and pretended to read.
“You're
going to be a great mom.”
“Thank
you.”
“My
mother would exhaust all options before asking me about my feelings. She'd buy
me books or send me to a doctor. I think she was scared of feelings.”
Mandy
didn’t know what to say.
“It's
my turn to be sorry,” he said. “You were kind to me and now I've made you
uncomfortable.”
“It's
okay. Sometimes you just need someone to talk to I guess.”
“Yes.
Thank you for listening. You've helped me more than you know,” he stood up,
holding tightly to his duffel bag. “I'm getting off at the next stop. Enjoy
your book.”
As
the train pulled out of the station, she watched him walk down the platform and
throw his bag into a trashcan.
I'm linking up with this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge. This week's word is:
EXHAUST (transitive verb)
1a : to consume entirely : use up <exhausted our funds in a week>
b : to tire extremely or completely <exhausted by overwork>
c : to deprive of a valuable quality or constituent <exhaust a photographic developer>
2a : to draw off or let out completely
b : to empty by drawing off the contents; specifically : to create a vacuum in
3a : to consider or discuss (a subject) thoroughly or completely
b : to try out the whole number of <exhausted all the possibilities>
1a : to consume entirely : use up <exhausted our funds in a week>
b : to tire extremely or completely <exhausted by overwork>
c : to deprive of a valuable quality or constituent <exhaust a photographic developer>
2a : to draw off or let out completely
b : to empty by drawing off the contents; specifically : to create a vacuum in
3a : to consider or discuss (a subject) thoroughly or completely
b : to try out the whole number of <exhausted all the possibilities>
This is a very interesting exchange. I wonder what he had in the duffel bag? Well done
ReplyDeleteThank you! Glad to make you wonder :-)
DeleteYeah I wonder what he had in the duffel bag too? Really interesting, I want to know more! :D
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by! I doubt the world will ever know what was in that bag!
DeleteSuch an intriguing ending! I like it (:
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! High praise indeed!
DeleteVery intriguing, can't imagine what he's going to do now. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you! Maybe he'll find something positive to do... one can hope!
DeleteOh! His throwing the duffel into the trash made the story!!
ReplyDeleteVery interesting turn to the end; I'm with everyone else, I really want to know what that's about!
ReplyDeleteOh wow, I need to know more! Great piece!
ReplyDeleteI'm with everyone else - more, please.
ReplyDeleteInteresting story. I like how he ditched the duffel bag. I think he had planned to harm himself or others and she changed his mind. (I could be totally wrong, though :))
ReplyDeleteYES...I like it. Human kindness is such a powerful emotion, such a powerful way to reach out and touch a life, someone that truly needs it.
ReplyDeletethis was touching and real.
I'm glad he dropped the bag, and left sad for both of them. Kindness shouldn't be in such short supply.
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