I
settle myself onto the brick wall for my coffee break. It's hard and a little
too tall for me to get comfortable, but it feels good to be off my feet. I've
been selling coffee and bagels since 6am. There are comfy chairs in the lobby
and little cafe tables as well. But I don't feel right taking them up. There
are people here with sick babies. They shouldn't have to hunt around for a good
spot to rest. Besides, I like it here where I can see the whirly-gig. Someone
told me it's really a kinetic sculpture or something like that, but I just call
it the whirly-gig.
I
don't watch the machine so much anymore. I've seen it so many times I have it
memorized. I watch the kids who watch it. Some of them are real sick―their hair
is falling out and they look too skinny. Some of them have big casts or
bandages. But there is something about that whirly-gig. It makes them forget
for a little while. They forget to be scared. They forget they're sick or
injured. They forget they're in a hospital. They're just kids with their eyes
wide open to watch the pool balls go up the little elevators and race down the
ramps. They listen to the chimes clang and they giggle and cheer. Sometimes
they pick their favorite color ball and follow its journey around the
whirly-gig.
Sometimes
I watch the parents too. They have too much on their minds to watch the
whirly-gig. They have doctor's appointments to keep and prescriptions to fill
and bills to pay. They stop in my shop
and buy a coffee for themselves and a treat for their kid. The lucky ones stop for a while and sit in those comfy chairs
and cafe tables and watch their kids. For a while they forget about what
brought them to Children's. They smile and watch their children watching the whirly-gig.
This
is in response to two prompts this week. The folks at Trifecta gave us the word
“lucky” to write about this week. Write on Edge gave us the word “wonder”
and a video of a kinetic sculpture from Boston's Musem of Science called Archimedean Excogitation, by George
Rhoads. We're fortunate enough to visit that museum pretty regularly and that
exhibit is one of my sons' favorite things at the museum. When they watch
it, I cannot help but think of another Rhoads piece that is in the center of
Boston Children's Hospital. My son James had hand surgery a couple of summers ago and the
sculpture provided a very welcome distraction for us.
I like this piece a lot - the clarity of description and honesty of response really stand out. Also layer on layer of watching... the narrator watching the parents watching the kids watching the machine (and me watching them all by reading the story I guess). It works. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteWe have a similar structure at our airport. They are so fascinating to watch. I feel like you really know your characters here - The sick children, the worried parents, the narrator. Nice write.
ReplyDeleteThis is a lovely piece. I think it captures wonder beautifully, even within the somber atmosphere of a hospital.
ReplyDeleteIt interweves the three prompts so well...the wonder, the luck and the use of the "Whirly gig". I love how it feels whimsical and free. A really lovely piece.
DeleteI really like the feeling of hope and wonder in this piece. I've been that parent, and you do welcome anything that takes your mind off the seriousness of why and where you are.
ReplyDeleteThis was beautifully written! And I found the compassion in the narrator's voice to be very touching. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your story.
ReplyDeleteOh, this broke my heart. Such sweetness full of sorrow. Well done.
ReplyDeleteI've had this open for a while now in my reader, forgive my delayed comment! I love that you went across town to the hospital, and I love the narrator you chose for it. The compassion is wonderful.
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