For
the first time in eighteen years, Karen didn’t wake up in the brass bed with
the pink chenille bedspread. She turned her head to see Henry’s sleeping face.
His head rested on the arm of the worn blue velvet sofa. She didn’t want to
disturb him, but needed to use the bathroom.
Karen
slipped out of his arms without disturbing him. “You don’t look any different
this morning,” she said to her reflection in the bathroom mirror. “Well, what
did you expect? A red A to appear on your chest?” She had been unsure what to do the night before, but
instinct guided her body. In the light of the morning she had nothing to direct
her.
Henry was still
asleep when Karen went back into the living room. She sat in her grandmother’s
maple rocker and looked around the room. The furniture was dated and the lace
curtains were hopelessly out of fashion. At least she and Peggy kept it clean.
Karen was afraid
of the moment he woke. What if he saw her as the girl he found crying in a
phone booth outside the hospital? What if he only saw the girl so desperate for
comfort she begged him to take her? What if he saw the tired furnishings of
poor white trash family?
Henry stirred,
stretched, and nearly fell off the narrow sofa. Karen rushed over and knelt at
his side.
“I was afraid to
wake up,” he said. “I thought I was dreaming.”
I’m linking up with
Write on Edge. This week’s prompt was to “use setting to deepen the development
of your story. You can use it to
give insight into a character or a conflict or simply to evoke an emotional
mood from your reader.” This picks up where I last left Karen. You can read
that segment here. My complete series about Karen can be found here.
Victoria, I really enjoyed the way you set this up. We see all of her insecurities, emotionally, while seeing the physical details of the room as well. Then the final line from Henry? So lovely.
ReplyDeleteNice job. I was really empathizing with her, and that final line was my favorite too.
ReplyDeleteI loved that last line. It shows so perfectly the self doubt, the uncertainty, and all for nothing. It's what women wish men would say. :)
ReplyDeleteAwwww....Henry won me over with his first line.
ReplyDeleteI love how you illustrated her insecurities in the shabby but cared for surroundings. My favorite line was the one about the scarlet letter. Henry's comment is something that opens up such possibilities! Wonderful job with this prompt!
ReplyDelete